Rose Canes Street Dickson 27.
Los Angeles 9857
January 12 2005
Dear Sindy
Baby, I'm sorry. But what you've done to me did no good to us either. I lost my desire to eat my protein bars, injecting my arms. Look baby just come back to me please. Since you walked out my door my apartment has been a disaster. I rarely wash the dishes, clean my room, in fact I'm barely home. But honey I promise you, that if you come back to where you belong in my arms, I will change. I'll be a better man, I'll change for you.
Dear Jack
Change? Do you know how many times that word came out of your mouth? Well I'm done with you and all your lies. I wasn't expecting you to say anything different anyway. I do not want anything with you. Lately that I've been single I feel a lot better than when I was with you, it was like I was locked up. You treated me like trash. Do you think I appreciate something like you? As far as I know, I deserve a lot better. It ended Jack, long long ago.
Dear Sindy
I love you! isn't that enough? Look I know that if I apologize a hundred times it won't change anything. But everyone deserves a second chance. Please Sindy believe me. I'm not playing around anymore. If you come back and see how I am and how I've been changing my bad habits cleaning the apartment, I stopped smoking too. Listen if you want to forget everything we had, it's alright. But I want you I need you. You're the one I need
Dear Jack
Jack call me tomorrow at 8. See you soon
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3 comments:
The title mathces perfectly with the story!!! I loved the rejection part from the girl and then her asking him to call her. It showed that she still loves him. And his begging was persuasive too. It's very well written, and is detailed enough to the point where we understand that the man did something unforgivable to her although in the end its sort of a mystrery as to if shes going to forgive him or not. :)
Again, like Gia said, the title is perfect for the story. I also like the way you made Jack and Sindy talk to each other. I felt like i was there in the room with them. Also, the ending, call me at 8, is good because you don't know whats going to happen, its a mystery. Also, the things he stopped doing, eating protein bars and injecting his arms was a good addition, funny. Overall i think it was good, i know what was going on and you left us hanging at the end so well done. Only 1 thing, there are some missing commas in there :)
It was a fascinating epistolary. I liked it. I also liked the way it ended, it wasn't like most of the stories that have a happy ending.
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